Create Powerful Imagery in Your Writing
We’ve heard the old montage “Show, don’t tell” so many times that
it’s become stale–and what does it mean, anyway? It’s an easy phrase to
utter, but
how do you achieve resonant, meaningful description that will make your words come alive? This simple checklist, from
The Writer’s Little Helper by
James V. Smith, Jr., is a concise list of best practices for creating
rich imagery that will have your readers clamoring for more.
- Paint
the image in small bites. Never stop your story to describe. Keep it
going, incorporating vivid images, enlarging the action, and putting the
dialogue in context.
A sponge carpet of pine needles covered the trail. It cushioned their soles and absorbed the sounds of their footsteps.
Rhonda stopped short and whispered, “Something’s coming. There. To the right. A bear?”
- Incorporate images into action. Suppose I had written:
A million years of discarded pine needles lay on the forest floor, carpeting the trail.
That’s
description. Static. The author’s talking. Can you hear him reading
from an encyclopedia? The difference in the first version is tying their
walking to soundless footsteps. This clears the way for Rhonda to hear
and see.
She pointed at a looming hulk, for all the good that pointing would do in the ink of night.
Bill grasped her arm. “No. It couldn’t be.”
But the crashing of brush told them it could.
“Yes. Get up a tree.”
- See
through the character’s eyes. Hear through her ears. When you can, use
the character’s senses instead of the author’s. It’s called character
point of view.
She felt her pulse both in her
throat and under the grip of that hand of his crushing her forearm. His
breath. She heard it in short, chattering bursts. She smelled it, too.
Fear stunk.
- Use the tiny but telling detail.
She
tore free of his grip and leaped off the trail. A spider’s web tugged
at her face. Any other time she would have screamed. She ran into a
tree, a rough pine bough slapped her breasts, and needles stabbed at her
eyes. Any other time she would have cursed.
The spider’s web. Ever ran into one?
- Choose
action-bearing verbs. Cushioned, absorbed, stopped, whispered, pointed,
grasped, tore, leaped, tugged, screamed, ran, slapped, stabbed, cursed.
These words do so much more than say what is. They indicate first fear,
then panic.
- Choose action-bearing non-verbs. Looming is a verb form used as an adjective. Crashing is used as a noun.
- Invent fresh viewpoints.
She
climbed blindly. And so quickly. Like a ladder. That was scary. If she
could scale this pine so easily, couldn’t the bear climb it, too?
She drove her head into a branch. But the sound of crying wasn’t hers.
“Help. It’s got me.”
Bill. Oh, God, Bill.
The bear had him. Still she climbed, seeing nothing but sparklers of pain in her head.
He shrieked at her from the dark below.
She did not—could not—respond.
This
is the viewpoint of a woman in panic and pain. When she looks into the
darkness, she sees only sparklers. Clearly, she’s so frightened, she’s
only trying to save herself.
- Create an image without saying so.
The pine limbs now bent like those of a Christmas tree. A fresh breeze chilled her skin.
“Bill,” she whispered. “Speak to me, for God’s sake, speak to me, Bill.”
But he did not. All she could hear was snorting and thrashing. She put a
hand to her mouth. She thought she might scream but nothing came out of
her mouth. Fear of attracting the bear kept her quiet. The pitch on her
hand glued her lips shut.
And, yes, the shame. That silenced her, too.
The thin limbs bending and the fresh breeze tells us Rhonda has climbed
high into the tree. The chill tells us she’s been sweating. And the
pitch, though she and we didn’t notice it in the climbing, is there on
her hands and face.
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